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southern sweetheart
Junior Member

since 2003-12-28

Posts 18

0 posted 2004-04-12 06:26 PM

they always judged her
when she kept to herself
she didnt want to bother anyone
so she acted out

she was known as the geek
the nerd
the ugly little girl
she cried sometimes in the back of the class
why didnt we see that she wasnt all there ?

then one day they all got a call
that weird little girl
that sat alone
left this world

many cried the next day
but it was just a show
see no one knew her
or the pain she kept all to herself
she had good grades and in many clubs
all she ever wanted was a friend
why didnt u give her that much ?

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-04-12 07:04 PM

ok... Wow!! I know someone who is kinda like the girl in the poem, and it really got me thinking about her. This poem was awesome and I really can't wait to read more of your poems.

~Alli~

Fleur
Member

since 2004-04-09

Posts 103

2 posted 2004-04-13 11:20 AM

This poem reminded me of a girl in my class too... This hurted me a lot... The poem is really sad, you can't imagine how much I cried... I wonder if this is a true story? iF this happened in real life...? But, I think that this poem is amazinG! Very good job...

southern sweetheart
Junior Member

since 2003-12-28

Posts 18

3 posted 2004-04-13 02:25 PM

thanks
sorry it made u cry

its not a true story in my life
but im sure some where it is
if it remined u of someone i did my job
now go and make friends
good luck !!!!!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2004-04-13 02:34 PM

Jamie~
Great to see you here ... and this is such a poignant piece of writing~

You touched ... that makes it VERY GOOD~

Now it needs a *grabber* of a title -
How's about ... Did She Ask Too Much?

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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UnsilencedWords666
Member

since 2003-11-19

Posts 63
Broken Memories & Falling Tears

5 posted 2004-04-13 05:49 PM

Wow-This was hella good...really got me thinking about the kids that I see everyday in the halls of my school that I never really bother to pay attention to...I think I'm gonna take what I gathered from this poem and just say hello to them...thanks for this amazing write...keep writing!

*~*nessa bear*~*

You can’t choose who you are Only what you will be Why can't you choose To let me be me...*~*Nessa Bear*~*

southern sweetheart
Junior Member

since 2003-12-28

Posts 18

6 posted 2004-04-14 01:39 PM

awww thanks

go make friends
hehe

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