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Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2004-04-10 07:53 PM

v.1 (i used to close my eyes and let myself dream
trying to remember when things were what they seemed
i would lay around for hours, dreaming of his face
there were certain memories i just could not erase
forever was never just a word to me
it was my whole world, my everything)

ch.(the way he used to hold me in his arms
would give me chills down my spine
whenever i needed him
he was there...he was mine
i couldn't believe that he would hurt me
i handed him my heart
only to land in a puddle of tears
with pieces torn apart
i just want to lay here forever
till i can forget how to breathe)

v.2(everything is in the past..a word i cannot say
i'm laying here on the floor...trying to stay
where i am...i don't want to leave this feeling behind
but here i cannot think...you still control my mind
i know your just around the corner from my touch
but i have to look away...its hurting me to much)

ch.( )

end.( walking down the road....picking up the pieces...waiting for someone...to give me a good reason.....

to breathe again)

i'm sitting in the dark....waiting...
waiting for you to see me.

xno4everx
Junior Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 14
NY

1 posted 2004-04-10 09:21 PM

i like i a lot and the rhyming isnt forced =] ...me gusta mas!! heh <33

//..Two souls with but a single thought, two hearts that beat as one..\\

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2004-04-10 09:53 PM

thank you...for commenting

i'm sitting in the dark....waiting...
waiting for you to see me.

Fariegirl
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 147

3 posted 2004-04-11 10:58 AM

Hey Kourtney (lol) How are you doing, I loved this poem. Good write.

~*Faries exist.*~

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-04-11 06:42 PM

very, very nice.

~Alli~

sweet_cute_palestinian04
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

5 posted 2004-04-12 12:47 PM

wow....keep it up..i love it..

::^love^::

wishing on a star
Junior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 19
sleeping in my warm bed =)

6 posted 2004-04-14 08:10 AM

Hey Corkeney!! hah!! guess who? lol!! nice write!! you do so well and i really liked this a lost...is it about who I think its about? hmmm!!

<33~Chloey

young naive & vulnerable to the world

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