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Your Crying
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Your Crying |
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Sass Junior Member
since 2003-05-10
Posts 21 |
Heart breaks. The shattering sound resounds but is heared greatly in my head. The sonic boom exploads and it feels like death. No tears No sounds just a blank stare concieved from my confusion and anger. Looking into the mirror and I see you looking back. Both of us crying. I can hear your voice crying out and your cries on the wind running through my room. No changing it now. I lay here and cry tears of vanity. Rain falls on my smile and washes it off. Nothing left a lifeless face. Scared to love, to afraid to lose. My heart cracks, scaring it. Shards break off and consume my soul. Left with nothing whole. Pieces of me gone, chunks cut out and lost. I look into the mirror and see you... Your crying. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
The last two lines are awesome to me. are you talking about the other person, or yourself? It would be so cool, and abstract if you were talking about the other person. I love this poem. I hate that it is the product of all the pain you are experiencing. But I love that you have a creative outlet such as writing. I love you. ~Lex |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
there are lots of powerful emotions in the poem and for that reason i like it...my condolences on any hard ships in your life, may you come out a better person...keep writing when you live you begin to die |
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UnsilencedWords666 Member
since 2003-11-19
Posts 63Broken Memories & Falling Tears |
This was beautiful...keep up the amazing work! *~*nessa bear*~* You can’t choose who you are Only what you will be Why can't you choose To let me be me...*~*Nessa Bear*~* |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I really liked this poem! Great write . . . Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This was very very good. Thanks for the read. Jen Everything gets better in the end, and if it's not better, it's probably not the end. |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
Welcome to Piptalk! I liked your poem, and the end of it. I hope to see more of your work. Welcome again. ~*Faries exist.*~ |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
This was filled with emotion and beauty. The whole poem was just... um... Well, I can't find the right word to describe how much I really loved this piece of work. But with your talent, you probably wouldn't find it hard to find a good one.  Well done and thanks for a great read. Ixxi "Where paper cuts, and bloody hands, In the middle, they will meet" |
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Sass Junior Member
since 2003-05-10
Posts 21 |
To lexy, yes...this is to someone else. I believe you were at my house when i wrote this one. I love you lex! ~Kassi |
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