Dark Poetry #4 |
Summer Stings of Cabin Greys |
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Digging our fingers in wood-wall cracks Puzzling through what must be done Do not weep as these beams consume you We shall never stay long, for we fear ourselves We bar the door As this rain creeps down How strong we came In our stolen box I say this now, for I do not know Through these windows I ought not go Hell has come, they do not slow Yet, through some mercy I do not choke From soaking curtains around my throat Find now in me some blistered seeds These are the things I thought I’d come to be Taking with us what we have not lost We set ourselves on coat hangers to sway and rot Through these panels we dream of self The crow still screams Through these twists and plots “Fear us now, so we forget you not.” |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
heya, now this is what I call Art =) very nice imagery in this...now go make a music video with it or something! - River Running out of pain |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
reminds me of halloween "We set ourselves on coat hangers to sway and rot" my favorite line. you always have something captivating to relate. that's why I always read your work. |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
It's funny taht you mention making a music video out of it, because almost all of my poems are spawned from an image or images in my head, which slowly evolve into words. I'm glad to see you've enjoyed it. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
That was intense! I must say you have a knack for getting me tied up in your words. Masterful! Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very dark and pulling. A satisfying read. Corinne |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I suppose I not ought to read dark poetry when feeling in a dark mood, but I found myself here and I'm glad I stopped by -- this is very good. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
nice and creepy , deep wonders -wolf |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
nice write ryan, engoyed it. Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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