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PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

0 posted 2004-07-17 11:56 PM

I wake to sleep
And in sleeping find
That life is an illusion
To keep the truth
From seeping out
And shattering our delusions

I withdraw into the sanity
Of my own little head
Where up is down, and down is up.
The ground is black,
the sky is red

I watch myself spinning
Forever down
Like I’m behind the glass.
I’m looking in, I’m yelling “Stop!”
In a pool of lies, I’m about to drown.

I wake to sleep
And in sleeping find
That life is an illusion
To keep the truth
From seeping out
And shattering our delusions

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-07-18 12:45 PM

Loved this soo much

this is brilliant.
You have such a way with words and i can hardly explain how good that was.

also loved your other one

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pee in his/her pants - Brandon

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

2 posted 2004-07-18 11:50 PM

Thanks. I really like your stuff too. Course, I don't usually post about anyone else's because I feel like an idiot when I can't seem to figure out what to say. Anyways, thanks again.

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

3 posted 2004-07-21 07:01 PM

Absolutely breathtaking...I actually don't know what to say! It was...amazing! Words don't seem to come to fruition with this poem. I believe I am still in a trance of awakened slumber with dreams of reality that are emitted from this poem. Awesome read!

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

4 posted 2004-07-21 07:12 PM

I withdraw into the sanity
Of my own little head
Where up is down, and down is up.
The ground is black,
the sky is red

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this was soo... amazing.
Totally brilliant,
and the chorus, was so true.
I really loved this poem.
It sounded sort of like a song too.

Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

5 posted 2004-07-21 07:30 PM

This is written very superbly, I must say. The flow is decadent, pats for that my friend. Excellent write, I shall be looking for you more

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spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

6 posted 2004-07-23 10:29 AM

i have thought this many a times. in fact i too have a poem about my own little world. because i dont belive in only one reality. gone is my world is the title of the poem. but i think you caught what i was feeling in a better way.

"alone yet unafraid to hurt. i go through every day trying to find my way. where is the light. where is my fight. is this how it ends?"

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

7 posted 2004-08-16 01:49 PM

Aww, thank you muchly guys. ^_^

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