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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Devastation Destruction Ruin, All I ever seem to bring, And misery follows Wherever I go It might be better If I was alone And spared everyone From my mind All I ever wanted Was something And now I have Nothing And that’s all I deserve, My ruination |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I would like it with more depth, but the idea was good. Hollow. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
A very self-loathing piece. Very vague. You could definately go into more detail with it. describe more about your mind, and why everyone should be spared from it, and their reactions to you, and your behavoir. It just needs to more detailed, less general. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
That's why it is a poem. Not a diary. Thanks for reading. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Wow, how in the world could have seen inside my universe like that?! That's absoulutely mind boggling. Again, wow. I loved it and yet, it pained me so to see my thoughts and feelings opened up like that. Masterful. Short. Bittersweet. Poetry. That rocked! yv Yv-Goddess of Her Domain |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
I liked it. I guess I don't see it as vague so much as open to personal interpretation. It can mean different things to different people. There are several different kinds of ruination. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
PainBane....you hit the nail on the head. I couldn't explain it any better than that. yv...thank you. Your universe too? |
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