Dark Poetry #4 |
Now im going to kill you..like only a best friend could |
Sweetest Sorrow X Member
since 2004-01-19
Posts 146From a cradle to a casket |
the cutlass of friendship went right in the heart life is like getting stabbed in the back and watching it bleed every acton you make, every word you speak is part of your misery tree that grows out of the soul and is chopped down to be fed to the fire in your eyes tears roll down my face acid burns holes through my flesh this wound is bone deep but the pain is not fresh your so stubborn pride is a sickness get well soon i love you i hate you your my life, your my doom now we're back to the start will this mindless fighting stop or will you enver let go? the past has happened too late, oh well get over this bridge before i drown you in your own shallow shell You better count your lucky stars that everything I wish for..doesnt come true |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
Wow - This is really great. I loved it. "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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Theory Junior Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 23N. CA. USA |
"pride is a sickness get well soon i love you i hate you your my life, your my doom" awesome write! really enjoyed thanks |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Sad and beautiful write I must say, very good imagery to help the reader feel how you do. I know this feeling all too well. Keep your head up girl. {{HugZ}} Brian Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
wow this is awesome. i love the way it flowed |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
nice write, encapuslating angst nicley Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
love all of ur poems, but this one is extra good. awesome loveandempathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Whoa, nice, intrigueing title, by the way. Hollow. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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