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Dark Poetry #4

Leaving Everything

Defective
Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 73
Salisbury NC

0 posted 2004-05-12 02:05 AM

This is about leaving my family and friends to start my life over somewhere else.

I counted my blessings
and put them away
come back when I need them
some other day

You said I could get new friends
and have your family as my own
but I'm still wondering
if I can reap what I've sown

I just hold my breath
until I can exhale
I've waited for this forever
but I'm so afraid to fail

Your voice on the phone
it breaks me into pieces
and I'm torn between the
lines and the creases

I hope that you will understand
my dilemma here
it's not that I don't love you enough
and it's not that I don't care
I just need some time to figure things out
and to know that I'll be happy there

Destinys_Fallen_Angel
Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 75
Boise Idaho

1 posted 2004-05-12 04:19 AM

a very interesting poem filled with emotion
great job i really liked this poem

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LucidityNow
Member

since 2001-02-06

Posts 118
Canada

2 posted 2004-05-12 07:40 AM

I've waited for this forever
but I'm so afraid to fail

I hope that you will understand
my dilemma here
it's not that I don't love you enough
and it's not that I don't care
I just need some time to figure things out
and to know that I'll be happy there

I feel you, I moved away from home last year. And since then I've wanted so badly to both keep moving away, and run back to safety. This poem, although inspired by insecurity, shows diligence. Great stuff.

and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-05-17 03:54 AM

I feel like that sometimes

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