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EliJah New Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 8 |
demons screamin, giving chase thru a pitch maze paranoid to twisting shadows, the only sight in the haze choked lungs, consumed with Hades dark angels breathe mouth open to curse, black blood spews from my souls depth they turn on me, stabbed in the back by my own spine darkness embodied with my former self intertwined still with haste memories flood of my closed casket past fastened to a coffin, unable to loosen the cast self rightousness flows from the throat of some preacher man my girls tears landing on my chest, yet I cannot reach her hand lowered into the earth I've hated all my crooked life fools prayin over my hopeless soul but justice is rife coffen closed, darkness welcomes me with only contempt it mocks my belated and vein attempts to repent each spade of dirt like the convictions of the dark judge only my mind hears my screams, my voice does not budge tears fill my eyes yet on my face there seems drought higher state of conciousness looking for some way out drifting to a stop as i behold a ferocious sight witness and imminent victim to the king of the night |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
awesome piece |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
wow great 1...keep it upp Jana,, |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
so basically what I got out of it was that something happened and your dead and in Hell where you have for the first time in reality absolutely no hope GIS No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless |
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Theory Junior Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 23N. CA. USA |
"each spade of dirt like the convictions of the dark judge only my mind hears my screams, my voice does not budge" lot of good lines. I liked this one. great peice. I actually read it a few times. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
I'm with Greeny on this one...it was a good write but it leaves me wondering a lot. I guess that's one thing about reading poems...you don't always know what circumstances people are writing under. this reminds me of Chop Suey from S.O.D. I like. but hey, it would be kool if you could tell the story behind this, even if you just e-mail me, lol. anywho, later. - River Running out of pain |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
I like the fact that it makes ya wonder  Tara |
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