Dark Poetry #4 |
Not So Long. |
Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Plagued with the feeling of a devil, Strumming the strings of my pulsing heart, Wonder if tomorrow finds me here, In the same place. Unmoving, It’s unnerving, What will I do? When the morning rises, And the sun decays, Until the dark possesses, The sky once more. Your musty scent, Lets on a secret, I want to unveil, You’re flustered, The question I asked rings in the air. The dusty air, Infects my mind, I scream into the sheet of black, Worrying above my weary head, I’m falling again, Into your body. You accept me, You’re proud, You’re ego boosts, You don’t realize how this hurts. How it burns, I’m here again, The dawn rises, Soon it sets, I’m here again. I can’t move, Till I know, What your secret is, Then you tell me and I pull back, You walk away, I watch the places where your footsteps seem indented, Into the earth, Always and forever, Suddenly doesn’t seem so long. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hey courts, this is amazing. i dont know wether u realise how amazing this peice is. its unbelievable, like something a professional wod write. i cant beleve how bloody great this is. the imagery, the rhythm, the rhyming, EVERYTHING about it worked, u asked me tday which was my fav of urs, this def has the number 1 spot. wow keep rockin darkness no one gives a s**t, as long as you smile. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Thanks Sophie, i love this piece. And i'm glad you do too! However long the night, the dawn will break. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
"The dusty air, Infects my mind, I scream into the sheet of black, Worrying above my weary head, I’m falling again, Into your body." This part was incredible!! Amazin. I like this a lot. The Imagery was awesome. ~Vampire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
greatness miss GROWL oh but sophie, after this piece, courts IS a professional. I agree with soph 110% U GO CHICA ENJOY RANGI Call no man happy till he is dead. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Rachelle - Hey thanks so much i'm happy you liked this poem Lor - Love....you little charmer Hollow "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
Nice job, I saw It! Better, I felt it... Click |
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