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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-02-17 10:57 AM

She isn't but a soul who believes in nothing more than herself
And the temporary lease she has on life.
Money, sex, greed, a black and tormented hole.

Take all thats given and then grab somemore
Rich and wealthy cash of gore
Gruesome gold with bloody stains
Pitty she will fall

Barricade on her life
Run of earth confide
Bowing to the moon
Electric vibrant stench
Confusion just a bit

A wreath of hardened thorns
Well known lies and horns
Blind with death and fire
Drugs take her higher still

Wrath her death comes natural
Foundation of her sin
The solid surface sturdy
Now supports the spread of all her skin

Chunks of flesh blackened cling attached to bone
Gray misty soul and dammned
Sparks and teeth and stench
Eternal square of housing

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

1 posted 2004-02-17 01:14 PM

I liked this a lot "A wreath of hardened thorns, Well known lies and horns" that is some solid rhyming right there, i really enjoyed! nice and dark.

- River

sleep my precious slumber

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2004-02-18 12:27 PM

AWESOME JOB
i cant belev yoiu can rhyme so easily
i find it so amazingly hard!

but i really like this poem! oi love the third verse!

KEEP ROCKIN

darkness

PS I MAKE GREEN SOUNDS???

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-02-19 11:37 AM

Thanx everybody. Cobain was awesome.

GIS

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

4 posted 2004-02-19 10:02 PM

"A wreath of hardened thorns
Well known lies and horns
Blind with death and fire
Drugs take her higher still"

I like this. Great rhyming.

~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

5 posted 2004-02-20 01:53 AM

GIS, could i agree with you more? Kurt is one of the most inspirational people to have ever lived. Even tho I cant remember him i miss him. His music and lyrics is pure genius. They way he expressed himslef is amazing and he has such a gift to be able to do so.

keep the poems coming GIS!!!

keep rockin n rollin

darkness

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

6 posted 2004-02-20 11:10 AM

Thanx. I just reread this and it seems a bit choppy and the general idea of the flow of things seems like the construction of a half built house.

GIS

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

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