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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Beating on, beating on, gonna break her. So damned easy to decompose. Have to run till im eroded, exploited. Line her up for the firing line. Broken not as beautiful as shattered? Forbidden is the easiest narcotic till you get queasy on the rush. Sickening honesty, didnt realize the joke was on me. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow. i love this one the rhythm made it feel like it was running through my head. i loved how you set it out as well. the ending was well written and concluded it well. awesome job. no suggestions! keep rockin  darknessYou can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
dido with darkness Vagabon the Lost One |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I like this. The flow was great. The rhyming too. I think i will save this. ~Vampire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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