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Barbed Wire |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Rounded eyes full of fear, Peek through the rough cold mesh, Callused hands grip the fence, A whip breaks through the tender flesh, A hawk’s call ends short, The sweaty palms slip away, “Work faster,” shouts the guard, In a unknown foreign way, The cool steel feels hot, When all you know is pain, The parched throat of the child, Screams a wish to the rain, The clouds above grow closer, They watch down on the people, A boy was shot dead for wandering, To freedom over the hill, Rounded eyes full of fear, Close in weary and in shame, The rough hands of a child, Closed over barbed wire down the lane, You would have never known it happened, If the journalists hadn’t found, The wounded body of a child, Lying lifeless on the ground, You were watching a movie, But right across the street, A child was sick and tired, Of having to hear his own heart beat, The guards were demons of a fantasy, The cold a bedsheet spread too thin, The boy an image of himself, And the barbed wire was his skin, I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
Courtney. i read this three times each time it became sadder and sadder i love it oh how you are wonderful thankyou so much for this it also became a song lol LOR Silhouetted by Deception |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Oh Love thanks heaps, This is a sad poem i know  Thanks for replying I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
You were watching a movie, But right across the street, A child was sick and tired, Of having to hear his own heart beat, The guards were demons of a fantasy, The cold a bedsheet spread too thin, The boy an image of himself, And the barbed wire was his skin, -------------------------------------- I love that part, but all the rest is really cool as well...great poem! ~*brezee*~ |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
  omg this is so sadhow could you make this up? its so sad You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
i feel like i should re-reply cuz i read this once before but i dont think i was really paying much attention to it...this is, although a little sad, an awesome write...i liked all of it...very creative...great job! ~*brezee*~ |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
This is so good. I love it! It's perfect the way it is. "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Wow. Umm thanks, I haven't been on for so long, and this was one of first sooo.....maybe I'll get back into the swing of things. Lol Hollow.  "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow! This poem is so amazing that you have my cryign over here ~Alli~ |
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