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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2004-02-16 12:39 PM

Along came it's time.
When leaves changed suits,
and bodies are taken with a silver spoon.

The two building spread it's shapes,
as the sun masked off the window to see it's smile.

I touched my feet,
and turned my nose,
took my arrow and guided it through the rubble.

An arrow that flew on a timeless current,
never touching it's flight.

To much I have asked myself,
drained the answers through my soul and to her knees.

There isn't a window to paint her picture,
as an angel stricken without her wings,
shines with her hands.

Facesless by the suns rise,
eyes are creatively chanced like the skin of her domain.

A castles room beyond the corridors of her heart.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-02-16 12:57 PM

LOVED IT
OMG LOVED IT
OMFG I LOVED IT SOO MUCH

AAHH IM SAVING THIS

LOR

Silhouetted by Deception

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-02-16 01:33 AM

Me too! Me too! Me too!

This is the first poem ive read of yours, but man im glad i did read it, ive bookmarked u,

Tomer this is awesome stuff, post more!

Hollow

I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2004-02-16 02:06 PM

good to see a post from you.

Its always a treat.

"Along came it's time.
When leaves changed suits,
and bodies are taken with a silver spoon."
I am especially fond of this part.

I like the mideval theme to this.
Very unique and always interesting.
Hope to see more...
~Lex

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-02-16 11:32 PM

WOW I LOVED IT

AGREE WITH WAT EVERYONE SED!!! AHH I HAVE TO SVAE THIS

IT IS JUST AMAZING... I CANT EXPLAIN WHY BECUS NO WORDS COULD DO IT JUSTICE!

AMAZING AMAZING AMAZING

KEEP ROCKIN YOURE DOING A HGREAT JOB AT IT!!!

DARKNESS

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

5 posted 2004-02-19 10:15 PM

I would have to say i agree with what everyone else has said, this is aa amazing write. I would love to hear more.
~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2004-02-21 11:50 PM

Thank you for all of the comments,always appreciated..

Tomer

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-02-23 03:21 AM

good write, I enjoyed the read

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