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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-02-07 01:35 AM

Time has come for offspring to be born.
Labors of the field
And pictures painted by the tons
Life in a twirl
Whats done is complete

Striving to be the top
Looking down on
Everest
The smallest still try
When I'm right near the sky
The first of the best

I do it once more and again and again
Never stop struggle and try
Growing older everyday
I think I begin to rot
Missing pieces of anatomy in variety and still the best

Looking down I'm so proud
What a fool I've become
Honorable the fool who dies just the same
Forgotten is his name
Leveled my plateau
And the mountain crumbles too

Still the very best forever
But a minute isn't very long and time lives forward
History repeats another ignorant fool comes along
Still the best

Growing pains are no more
And there is no complaint
Just the slow trip back where I came
Minute is my name

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

1 posted 2004-02-07 02:32 AM

is this catharsis from you or from a fictional charactor? anyways great write, adding this

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

2 posted 2004-02-08 02:15 PM

yeah, your right, life and importance only last a minute in this world...well said, i like! ok, i'm going to go post something too, lol, (following my own advice) =).

- Bonnie Sue (lol)

rest upon existence. seek life,
and forever never die.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-02-09 11:56 AM

thanx guys. You do that River. and catharsis seems to be coming from several directions

-GIS

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-02-09 01:17 PM

*applause*
VERY good. Especially the end.
I havem't read your work in a while, and it seems its getting better and better.
I love the theme of this.

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

5 posted 2004-02-09 08:45 PM

Very good, much enjoyed! Grover.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

6 posted 2004-02-09 10:54 PM

wow

i read that one, two , three whole times

it came each time more reasons to show that it was a minute
such amazing skill to be able to do that

i didnt like it too much at first but i love it now

great work GIS

LOR

Silhouetted by Deception

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

7 posted 2004-02-10 07:32 PM

I like this one very much, I think you wrote it very nicely.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2004-02-11 02:12 AM

thanx everybody. The idea behind it was to describe what its like to be at the very top of some level of skill, over everyone else. Then reallizing that when youre there you can't get any better and you loose interest. There is nothing left to do and it all becomes meaningless.

-GIS

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

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