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Armed, Luminous |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys 
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About sacrifice, I am not so sure now. A river falls or rises according to what leaves or enters it. But sacrifice is not the river. Compassion is not what leaves. For what enters, I have many names-I’d decide if I could, if I were meant to. There’s an instinct that is rare but does occur in humans, the ones who themselves feel no different-it’s any hour, forgettable- as they turn toward the work whose power will break them eventually, and make their name. I turn everywhere, I see shapes by which a holiness declares itself more and more, as if to be noticed were all it wants of me. The body, for example, in a cloud or mayflies stalled briefly in a light that passes now: now the moon- now the stars appearing, choir-like, with a choir’s tendency to make the soloist at once seem lonelier, and more complete. I'm not reckless. I'd comply, if I could. In a dream, there's a choice: precious freight, or the barge that carries it, or the water without which a barge can at first seem nothing. I choose the water, I choose with a wisdom that looks effortless because it is. It's that kind of dream. "So what befalls the flawless? |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I havn't been on in a while but I'm glad I didn't miss this one. Nice write. GIS a trickle of music fromm a well |
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Jelfling Junior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 21Indiana |
I really liked this poem, it touched me. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
AMAZING probably one of your best poems (thats ive ever read) wow intense You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks guys for reading! "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I really can't place your structure, but I don't really care, in this instance. It's just a really good write. Do you think I say "really" enough? "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
=) my name must be populer hee hee...i liked this one a lot eor!...i think me u and GIS should post more. *nods in confermation* anywho, later dude. - River rest upon existence. seek life, |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
This all seems very original to me, though the structure is a little confusing at times, but the words are so captivating that it doesn't really matter. I like it alot. |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Eor I have not been around for a while but I see that you have not lost your touch, We all have choices some just choose the wrong way, Impressed. Maggie [This message has been edited by cusick (02-13-2004 03:48 PM).] |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I see a lotof insight, and personal growth surfacing in this piece. I liked it, it had different kind of inconsistancy to it. But that made me like it more. Great thoughts. ~Lex (off to ponder) |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Hey eor, haven't been around for awhile. I enjoyed the write. But the ending.... can at first seem nothing. I choose the water, I choose with a wisdom that looks effortless because it is. It's that kind of dream. because it is, great stuff, or like that beer commercial, BRILLIANT!! See you around man. wayne If nothing is something |
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