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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
Underneath the mask There hides a face Covered in invisible scars Scars so deep they Never show nor leave People disregard my hidden self Pretend to never see them But I see their eyes As they search to find my flaws within I know they know something wrong But my scars are too deep to show My life is not a Show 'n' tell day It is dark, deep and deniable I hide beneath the lie That everybody hurts I make myself believe And it works But inside, deep Beneath the darkness Is the memory Of my painless happy days It hurts to remember And it pains to forget |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I know exactly how you feel, very sad poem, but you know what, sadness sometimes remains until tears of joy erupt, so hang in there. |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
OK, now that made me cry.. Whatever this is, I know you can get through it.. I know you can, even though it's obviously a difficult time right now, it will end, maybe not overnight and yes there will be times when you will cry inside for remembering what you've been through. These poems are really good, this pain you are/have been feeling has made a great effect on your writing. Hey, remember to smile. |
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serenities_blood Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56New Zealand |
yer soph, that was really deep. I have a shocked expression on my face at the moment. Are the scars what i think they are? Or is this something new? Please reply by email. You've got me worried... xoxLORxox |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I feel your sadness but sense that you've got this figured out as well. Take courage in the fact that your healing is shown through poetry, and with that? learning. Well done inside and out...take care hun! ~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
a shiver of cold went though me when i read this Vagabon the Lost One |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
my god this is amazing.... very similar to the poem i wrote called faces yet so different..... the way you have written this it seems you are going through this right now..... if you ever need any help or advice about any thing and everything email me and i will see what it is i can do....... you have amazing talent and i hope to continue reading more of your poetry.... Always here for a chat Mel so this is me but what do you care about that???? |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I'm worried too, Love, is there something ur not telling us? The poem is excellent, very dark very deep. I like the invisible scars bit and the first line. Catch ya later Hollow I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you. |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Powerful poem. I liked it, I understand the struggle in this one all too well. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is good...I can really relate |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Amazing. I know how it feels, and i just want you to know that whatever it is, i am here if you wanna talk to me. This poem, was just wow. Very deep, and also very dark, and powerful. The last few lines were beautiful. It does hurt to forget, and even more to remember. ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I can relate. Its kinda like feeling like a whore and refusing to have sex. Just repeated beating of the face on a brick wall. -GIS Why live for gold when you can be happy? |
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