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My Shadow
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My Shadow |
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Lozza New Member
since 2003-12-22
Posts 5New Zealander (in UK) |
The sun warming on my back my shadow resting on the track My mind is shattered, tears still fresh when will my troubles come to rest? I walk along, am so detached, my mind and body can't be fetched My shadow moves, is all disjointed, to my being it is appointed. Its semblance, absolute a true reflection, grey, hollow, face value perfection. Like its owner its just a vision, out of the light, to find, a mission. Its true form is not discerned for in the shade, substance, concerned. Its sunny public face so real, solid, believable but it does conceal. The nature of a shadow, some say like me, it's caged at night, and not set free. In dimness, hiding and undefined, unknown to any and most confined. A shadow has but one public face, it runs from shade, in a head long chase. The sun warming on my back my shadow resting on the track. My mind is shattered, tears still fresh when will my troubles come to rest? |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
i liked the format in which you chose to write and the relevance of the emotion behind it. keep it coming! -Adam "beauty is in the eye of the beholder" -Finger Eleven |
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Lozza New Member
since 2003-12-22
Posts 5New Zealander (in UK) |
Thank you Adam. You've just made my day  ) |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
you're welcome. anytime. i'm currently looking for more of your work. what can i say? i like your stuff. i'm glad i made you happy  . |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow nice one! i love the discription you added to ur work. i agree... writing is extremely therapeutic!!! this poem remonds me of myself! nice poem... enjoyed reading it... post more!!! darkness |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow, i was reading through this wondering if you could pull off couplets without putting in unnessisary lines just to make it rhyme, but it worked great with this, so groovy =) nice poem. - River Love hurts as bad as it feels good. |
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