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i smell gasoline
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i smell gasoline |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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this is a response to the challenge located here: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000753.html i didn't try to fix anything on it. it was just off the cuff. looking forward to any more responses to the challenge. __________________________ i smell gasoline that can't be seen. the chilling night, the silence screams foundation's cracked i'm on my back soon this house will be a passing dream a nightmare come to life smothered in gasoline the innocent dreams born in this place will give way to a lasting scene of ash and soot and smoldering wood broken bottles... nothing good. shattered dreams will only gleam in a cleansing fire and gasoline. the pills may dull my senses but i still smell gasoline. i can barely move a muscle except with twitch and spastic squeeze. there's no comfort left in this place there's a hole in my heart, an empty space i've got no hope left, my soul is bereft and the tears i cry, no matter how fast they stream will be no match for this gasoline. i smell the smell of gasoline the smell of abuse and dash-ed dreams i taste coppery blood and twentysome Xanax i choke on the fear of what the next step of my plan is. i roll over in a childish way in the childhood house i've grown to hate sprawled in a puddle of gasoline i struggle to move; i writhe. i teem. i smell sickly sweet blood. i smell gasoline. my shaking hands holding a match's sheen. not one more child will suffer in this house. not one more child, not one more spouse. the matches fall, and the last i'll see are the fiery tears of gasoline. The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite. |
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The Esoteric Being Junior Member
since 2008-07-22
Posts 34MA, USA |
Looks like it would be fun, I'll be checking back later, hopefully with something :p ---------------- |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
wow - very impressive and touching it flows so well...thank you, P |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I didn't mean to ignore this one--and I'm very glad you posted it here. It leaves me a bit wordless, as it matches the dull roar of depression that is lately persisting inside of me. Thanks for contributing to a challenge that I wasn't brave enough to answer myself. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well Ethan, if you just wrote this "off the cuff" you certainly did a great job of writing it. I am still reading this poem over and over, trying to see what you intended me to read between the lines, but perhaps for once, it is all there right in front of me. Well written poem to meet the challenge. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Hey pal can you give me a light. My last cigarette for tonight. So light me up pal I’m eighteen. What’s that smell, is that gasoline ? |
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