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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2008-11-24 08:51 PM


this is a response to the challenge located here: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000753.html

i didn't try to fix anything on it. it was just off the cuff. looking forward to any more responses to the challenge.
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i smell gasoline that can't be seen.
the chilling night, the silence screams
foundation's cracked
i'm on my back
soon this house will be a passing dream

a nightmare come to life
smothered in gasoline
the innocent dreams born in this place
will give way to a lasting scene
of ash and soot and smoldering wood
broken bottles... nothing good.
shattered dreams will only gleam
in a cleansing fire and gasoline.

the pills may dull my senses
but i still smell gasoline.
i can barely move a muscle
except with twitch and spastic squeeze.
there's no comfort left in this place
there's a hole in my heart, an empty space
i've got no hope left, my soul is bereft
and the tears i cry, no matter how fast they stream
will be no match for this gasoline.

i smell the smell of gasoline
the smell of abuse and dash-ed dreams
i taste coppery blood and twentysome Xanax
i choke on the fear of what
the next step of my plan is.
i roll over in a childish way
in the childhood house i've grown to hate
sprawled in a puddle of gasoline
i struggle to move; i writhe. i teem.

i smell sickly sweet blood. i smell gasoline.
my shaking hands holding a match's sheen.
not one more child will suffer in this house.
not one more child, not one more spouse.
the matches fall, and the last i'll see
are the fiery tears of gasoline.

The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite.

© Copyright 2008 Ethan Halo - All Rights Reserved
The Esoteric Being
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since 2008-07-22
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1 posted 2008-11-27 06:19 PM


Looks like it would be fun, I'll be checking back later, hopefully with something :p

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prize
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since 2008-11-21
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2 posted 2008-11-29 03:39 PM


wow - very impressive and touching

it flows so well...thank you, P

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2008-11-29 10:13 PM


I didn't mean to ignore this one--and I'm very glad you posted it here.

It leaves me a bit wordless, as it matches the dull roar of depression that is lately persisting inside of me.

Thanks for contributing to a challenge that I wasn't brave enough to answer myself.

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4 posted 2008-11-30 01:25 PM


Well Ethan, if you just wrote this "off the cuff" you certainly did a great job of writing it.  I am still reading this poem over and over, trying to see what you intended me to read between the lines, but perhaps for once, it is all there right in front of me.

Well written poem to meet the challenge.

chopsticks
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since 2007-10-02
Posts 888
The US,
5 posted 2008-12-01 08:01 AM


Hey pal can you give me a light.
My  last cigarette  for tonight.
So light me up pal I’m eighteen.
What’s that smell, is that gasoline ?


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