Dark Poetry #4 |
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The Esoteric Being Junior Member
since 2008-07-22
Posts 34MA, USA |
The presence of the air the force the scare. I can sense it coming feel it expect it. The warning rolls in so loud so eerie. It's the after effect that stops my heart. ---------------- The Esoteric Being |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Suki... I like this one but you could definitely expand upon it.... it feels unfinished. I think more could be added in the middle.... the ending is as it should be. Know what I mean? Still badass Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
I agree with Mistrees May. Definately add on to this but leave the ending as is. |
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