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I just need you. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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the vibrations of my heart are shaking the floor still i'm invisable it's alright tomorrows another day tomorrows another heartache my tears are burning my face like acid like acid running down my face aiming for my heart i'm sick of crying all the time whats the point i don't need your pity i don't need your sympathy i just need you.. "hello my name is..Distance.." |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Intense, heartfelt words... Terri~  [This message has been edited by SharaRose (12-18-2003 12:33 AM).] |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Very nicely written, full of emotion. I enjoyed it, thank you. |
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Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
*~^my tears are burning my face like acid like acid running down my face aiming for my heart*~^ Brilliant simile, never thought of it that way, but so true. So very true... |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
oh my goood ogd... wow exhale that is amazing i know exactly how that feels... "i dont need your pity... i just need you" that is so true. but then what should expect from you? ONLY THE BEST OF COURSE!!! i love the way you write so keep posting! |
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Lozza New Member
since 2003-12-22
Posts 5New Zealander (in UK) |
I absolutely agree with all that is said above! Heartfelt and true. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
completely agree with this. bravo, it's a sick feeling indeed. - River Love hurts as bad as it feels good. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I feel this |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I'm feelin this. Amazing write. ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
mouth was actaully open for like 5 seconds before i realsied wat i was doing SO DAMN GOOD I LOVED THE END SO MUCH./....AND UR NAME EXHALE ROCKS!!! LOR In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
the last line was a nice twist, i would have not expected that ending, nice write "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Wow, this is a totally awesome piece! I love it it is so heartfelt, i think alot of people can relate to how your feeling in this poem! However long the night, the dawn will break. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very sad but well written poem...i could feel the heartache as i read.... Thanks for the words.... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
I love the acid tears... |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
exhale-been there, nice write. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
aaahh.... going through my library and found this again... one of my all time favourites. brilliant ending. sigh. love it thought it had to be brought back up to the top LOR put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
i love it... am there right now..... agree with everyone.... this is amazing and soooo heart felt.... keep up the writing.. Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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