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Out of Here
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Out of Here |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA 
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Out of Here- Riding through the shadows of a lonely moon Running from anxieties, fear and you Slowing when I see it coming Hiding in the past once more I cannot seem to find the way out again. Riding on the waves of an angry sea She is trying to kill me...won't let me be I am being dragged down under Feel my lungs, they're filling quickly I cannot seem to find the way out again Riding on the breath of a mournful wind Rising far above all that I have been Reaching down, but I can't touch it I am way too far above it I cannot seem to find the way out again There is nothing left for me here It is time to move ahead I was meant for so much more than what I've found It is time to light the sky up I know that I will tame the sea Make the wind content once more I will find a way to regain control Slowly shadows dissipate Waves are calm The wind is breathless I have found my way out of here Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
I can relate. I infer the "she" you refered to in the 2nd stanza is the sea... could it be somebody? -pyre |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Hey Mystress May! long time, no see.. How Have you been?? This poem is really good. Easy to relate to.. Great job!! ~Zach~ "And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion." |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The wording is a tad abstract, making it difficult to understand some of what you're saying. For example, I thought at first that I was reading a poem about someone driving or otherwise flying about on a moon of some other planet. The lines at the end, however, about leaving something that is inhibiting behind, were edifying and comforting to me. |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Hey Pyre....the 'She' is more than one person.... it is a culmination of persons that no matter where I run and hide, they seem to find me, follow me.... try to destroy me. Perhaps that's an exaggerated definition but it's the feeling that I had when I wrote it. Missed you, doll! Hey Zach.... I'm glad to be back.... I'd been in kind of a slump but am forcing my way back to the world. I'm doing as well as possible, which is a good thing. And yes, Fractal.... I tend to veer towards the abstract, at times.... sometimes it's easier to let out my emotions w/out being so direct. If I were to be too literal, then it would be easier to get into my head, therefore allowing just anyone in. This way, only the people that should be there.... the people who want to make that extra effort.... those are the ones that find their way in. And yes, the ending is meant to have that feel to it.... and I'm glad you felt it. Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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