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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2008-07-07 12:36 PM

Once when I was a young girl,
I fell in love with superman.
Whenever someone needed help,
He was there to lend a hand.
Once when I had just turned ten,
I fell in love with Prince Charming.
The princess he would rush to save,
When situations became alarming.
Once when I was finally sixteen,
I fell in love with an older boy.
I found that he was nothing like,
My superman, just a decoy.
Once when I was twenty-one,
I fell in love with the perfect guy.
But he wasn’t what I’d searched for,
Finally I let go of the lie.
Superman isn’t real and;
Prince Charming is a fake.
There’s no one who knows better,
Than the one his kiss didn’t wake.
So superman rest gently,
In your grave beneath the stars.
Don’t give me hopes anymore,
Just to add to my scars.

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-07-07 12:49 PM

ohh Brittany... this was AMAZING!! I love this!!
Krysti

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

2 posted 2008-07-07 02:47 PM

I agree with Hunnie. This is a very good poem and it evokes well the sort of disenchantment that everyone feels when he or she looks to the world around him or her for support rather than to the world within.

Some of the rhymes in this poem need work. Charming / alarming is a little forced.

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

3 posted 2008-07-20 02:48 PM

Awesome!!!! this poem is so true!!!! ^_^

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-07-20 05:49 PM

This is so true!! Great work! (library)

Zach

"When you cried I wiped away all your tears.
" When you screaed I'd fight away all of your fears..
And I held your hand through all of these years

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

5 posted 2008-07-29 01:13 PM

Sadly...

·´~`·»Brett«·´~`·

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

6 posted 2009-02-05 11:48 PM

I realize that this was a while ago, but i must comment. I've lived most of my life dreaming of "what ifs" and wishes...ur poem really reached out to me.
Wish I could see more of ur work (not that i deserve to, with my own absences...)

There is power in the pen.

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