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fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2008-07-06 10:49 PM

I see her again the next night
before the depths of the sea
as the moon gazed down upon us.
I still remember her question
I'm brave enough to try first.

It will take as long as we want
It's the only answer I can think of

Her face is still, eyes gazing
    straight out toward the distant
    horizon where moon and water meet
  I try again

We'll create and conceive and revel
for as long as we want because the
universe won't care and neither will
we when we're gone.
   Exactly
      It's a quiet answer but it's
      positive, assuring, calm.

                    Every universe has to die
again with          every person will perish
the universe        taking her ideas and
thing.              his stories with it.

      I wonder now
      would she stand
      there if I
      weren't here to
      see it?

   Why do you always talk about this?

I know the magic's been
broken now -- this is
one of those moments from
an artsy film where
the girl and I exchange
profundities that only
graduate students in
philosophy get and the
poor little undergrads
get headaches.

    But I'm not playing.
    She can live in her
    little emo world all
    she wants and I won't
    care.

                nor should you
                everyone dies
        so        everything
        what?     ends

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-07-07 12:42 PM

i just love the way you set up your poems.. its really cool and creative.

I liked the words in this to.. it flowed well

Krysti

ladylisa
Member

since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

2 posted 2008-07-16 07:05 AM

Enjoyed reading this, took to me several places to ponder, thanks! lis

Mystress May
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

3 posted 2008-07-16 05:40 PM

Hey doll.... I absolutely love your style.... your ability to be in multiple places at once yet making it easy for the reader to follow you into those places with ease.

~~~Amanda~~~

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

Melissa Inside
Junior Member

since 2008-07-19

Posts 13
Baltimore

4 posted 2008-08-07 12:06 PM

youre an extremely gifted writer. this is literaly one of the best poems ive read. no lie.

BeyaK
Member

since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

5 posted 2008-08-08 04:59 AM

i like reading this one... nice job!

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