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Dark Poetry #4

Fog of confusion

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-04-27 11:42 AM

Lying in the dark.
Hidden by the fog of confusion.
Never to see the lights of common sence.
Ever again.

Wishing to find the way through the forrest of dismay and abash.
Walking through the dark.
Breathe is so cold.
Clouded skies fill my mind.

Dark thoughts hold me down.
In this fog of confusion.
Sinking in the sand.
Suffocating by others hate.

This is how I live my life.
Stuggling day by day.
In ways no one understands.
Living like I'm walking though fog.
Never to see the light in which
I use to bask in and feel its warmth.

Now frozen in the cold and hate of lovers
In which I use to by fondly of..
Now stuck in the center of the Earth.
Burning off of what I become..

~Zach~

shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

1 posted 2008-04-27 11:47 AM

Ohh, I love the last line. I can just feel the emotion seeping through that single line. Great write Zach.

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

Ri
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since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

2 posted 2008-04-27 04:01 PM

This poem is great, although you are wrong in saying noone understands, for I feel every word of this myself
Knowing joy and then having it's absence is harder than forever living in misery, and this poem highlights that
Good write =)

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2008-05-05 08:43 AM

Thanks guys!! Yeah i know how u feel Ri..

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

4 posted 2008-05-10 11:18 AM

Very deep, moving.

wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

5 posted 2008-05-11 02:28 AM

I know how you feel to Zach im there rite now

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

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