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SkaaDee
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since 2008-04-07
Posts 116
Canada

0 posted 2008-04-10 08:31 AM


Platinum-like glass pushes silicate and ice.
Sparks stream as fireworks against the urban lit sky.
The grinding and the pushing and the scraping and squeals.
It's all harshness and hardness and rollercoaster screams.
It's steel against steel.

Wheels turning, silver spoked and cold
frantic, shiny and frozen.
Fire stricken acid burning alight
yellow fights black as red wrestles white.
Neon deflects bolts from a firey hell
machinations unrelenting both imagined and real.
It's all steel against steel.

The squareness and the angles encompass daggers and quills
turning and piercing and dripping.
Wicked tin towers gagged with wicked tin seals.
It's the forgotten remains of a onesided deal.
Smoke scalding steam scorching
steel against steel.

The lone screamer won't be, can't be heard
because there's no heart or breath or thought or mind
just relentless dispassionate movement.

It's the sound
the shine
the spark
the grind

It's the feel
of Steel against Steel.

[This message has been edited by SkaaDee (04-12-2008 08:52 AM).]

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Reborn
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since 2008-04-01
Posts 13

1 posted 2008-04-11 09:07 PM


I've just been inspired to redecorate my apartment with steel furniture. This would be a frightening way to describe a train to a blind man. But seriously this was a good poem.  I could visualize the movements and almost hear the sounds described in this poem.
SkaaDee
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since 2008-04-07
Posts 116
Canada
2 posted 2008-04-11 10:38 PM



that's why we have interior decorators, to prevent us from making those kinds of mistakes.


Thanks for reading.  


NeonKnight
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since 2008-04-12
Posts 36
New South Wales, Australia
3 posted 2008-04-12 01:21 AM


as reborn said, you can almost hear the sounds in the poem. You bring it to life and creat a world with words in this poems.
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