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Dark Poetry #4

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Shenko
New Member

since 2008-03-31

Posts 1

0 posted 2008-04-01 11:22 AM

Hey guys i'm a new member and this is first posting. Open to any suggestions.
When all I knew was lost and gone
Every memory I had was ripped and torn,
From joy's death, lonesome and sorrow was born
Which pricked my spirit like a sharpened thorn.

And infected my soul with incessant dejection
I am forever tormented by death's smiling suggestion,
So I long for an impregnable measure of protection
And an everlasting sense of unwavering direction.

Yet I see only black hope in sight
For the power of darkness conquers light,
Though I eternally struggle with tenacious might
Life has destined me to lose its fight.

And when I am met with death's embrace
I'll remember to wear a smiling face
For anywhere is better than here, this wretched place.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

1 posted 2008-04-01 01:25 PM

I especially liked the last line of the poem. "For anywhere is better than here, this wretched place." Great job on your first post and welcome to PIP.

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

CrimsonTears
New Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 5
Over The Rainbow

2 posted 2008-04-01 04:42 PM

Good poem you have here. Welcome to piptalk.

runningwithdoubt---x

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

3 posted 2008-04-01 11:59 PM

I love the last line too, welcome to pip

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

4 posted 2008-04-02 01:30 PM

I too agree with previous comments..Welcome to pip!

SATURN
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 78
ok,us

5 posted 2008-04-02 07:50 PM

good write welcome to PipTalk

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