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Dark Poetry #4

Ozu's Trains

JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

0 posted 2008-03-31 11:03 AM

bamboo shadows on the tatami mat
a gathering of crows on the fallen snow
my bones, the ragged branches of a winter tree

sleet at dawn in the whistling wind
the sound of water beating against stone
my voice, the cry of a loon on a winter sea

stir of wind in the river poplars
koi floundering in a shallow stream
my breath, the train that arrives and departs

a white chrysanthemum fading in twilight
star at the center of the apocalypse
my body, the lily floating in a tunnel of light

bittersweet and blood orange blossoms
enameled on the funeral urn
my ashes, the unborn child in monsoon rain

[This message has been edited by JenniferMaxwell (03-31-2008 11:39 AM).]

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

1 posted 2008-03-31 12:15 PM

beautifully dark. Life ended, sadly, in poetic beauty.
Each S, a traditional Japanese painting.
Elegant!!

Yoinn
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since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

2 posted 2008-03-31 08:20 PM

Very nice images...took me all the way there

Yoin

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

3 posted 2008-04-03 08:46 PM

Thanks for your kind comments.
Still working on this, haven't got it quite right yet.

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