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hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

0 posted 2008-03-14 04:26 PM

sorrows hidden
in my
smile

tears should
drip
from these eyes

but they dont
nothing happens
as it should

i'm unwanted
i'm a horror
to the universe

[This message has been edited by hiddensmiles (03-16-2008 06:32 PM).]

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-03-14 04:27 PM

Nice poem, really nice!!

~Zach~

~*With the wind and my heart at my side. I'll live the life i want*~

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-03-17 07:48 PM

thank you

JJ

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

3 posted 2008-03-25 12:07 PM

glad you liked it

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

4 posted 2008-04-04 01:00 AM

not many people write dark poetry,

JJ

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

5 posted 2008-04-19 09:02 PM

nice write!! this is how i feel to the world.

midnightdreamer

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

Again
Junior Member

since 2008-05-13

Posts 47

6 posted 2008-05-23 01:42 AM

"Not many people write dark poetry."

This is so true....I want to write darker stuff but I am always afraid of how DARK it will sound and if it will be taboo, or if it will offend someone. YOu have a point.

shakalakaboomboom
Junior Member

since 2008-05-19

Posts 44
V.A, U.S.A

7 posted 2008-05-23 05:25 PM

oh my gosh! i love this poem!! O__O

-again, you should try writing dark poetry..at least i think you should ^_^ and its ok if its really DARK, i know it'll be the darkest poem everr!

~Savana

Again
Junior Member

since 2008-05-13

Posts 47

8 posted 2008-05-23 06:32 PM

I know...I want to. I will. Everytime I try to write "sunny" things, I just turns dark in the end anyway. I like that....REALLY DARK. I think I could do that.

lost-in-a-mind-of-dreams
Junior Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 35

9 posted 2008-05-25 03:48 PM

i have felt this way before not fun. but nicly written.

*****dreamer*****

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