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fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

0 posted 2008-03-14 02:41 PM

I wrote this poem following the guidelines this
time..................................................................................................

Creepy crawlers on my bed
With a look of hunger that has not been fed
Or is this all in my head?

The room is now spinning
And the creatures are grinning
And my heart is accelerating
My mind and sanity start debating
Am I being misled?
Or is this all in my head?

My soul starts pounding trying to get out
What is going on? What’s this all about?
Crashing hard on the floor outside is the rain
And more creatures make my room their domain
The leader of the pack a woman named Mary Jane
Who kisses me softly driving me insane
But if I continue I will soon be dead
Or should I? Damn I am out of my head

I am sweating and have clammy hands
If I yell out for help will someone understand?
Or will they make me comply with their demands

My throat is drying
And the creatures are now flying
But my cough is slowly dying
I wish I was somewhere else instead
Of being here in bed out of my head
Seeing creatures dressed all in red
Flying around wanting to be fed
Wishing and hoping I would soon be dead
With Mary Jane as the head
And I would have fled
But my vision quickly spread
And tomorrow I won’t believe everything I just said..

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-03-14 04:26 PM

this is great! idk about saying "damn" idk if that goes against the guidelines of foul language. but over all great!!

~Zach~

~*With the wind and my heart at my side. I'll live the life i want*~

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

2 posted 2008-03-14 04:37 PM

Thanks fallin rain...and I read the guidelines and I am good.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2008-03-14 07:08 PM

thats good to hear i didnt want to see a great poem being taken off.

~Zach~

~*With the wind and my heart at my side. I'll live the life i want*~

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

4 posted 2008-03-14 07:23 PM

Thanks again

wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17

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the last place on earth

5 posted 2008-03-19 04:26 PM

you never cease to amaze

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

6 posted 2008-03-20 11:13 AM

Wisdomofthesword thank you and FYI I love reading your stuff.

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