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Broken Toy
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since 2008-02-29
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ThatSmallWorldCalledInsanity

0 posted 2008-03-06 02:44 PM


I don't know if this poem will be breaking the forum rules, considering it's a little violent, so I can understand if it's removed.
Otherwise, it's currently untitled and possibly needs a bit of work, all critics are welcome.
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A white carpet
Now turns red
From a thousand dead bodies
Which have bled.

The blood seeps through
The cracks in the floor
The monsters in your head
Call out for more.

They're saying to kill
To murder, destroy
Wipe them all out
Feed your starved joy.

They all laughed
And called you names
So now with a knife
You play your own games.

You torture them
Tease them, 'till they beg
You laugh back
'till your hunger's fed.

Then you let them
Suffer alone
In the dark
So far from home.

Your hands are black
Covered with filth
You try to wash it away
With the mounting guilt.

But all you do
Is scrape your hands raw
So you curl up
And cry on the floor.

You didn't want this
But they told you to
To get revenge
For all you've been through.

So you lie on the floor
Curled up in a ball
Feeling your mental block
Crumble and fall.

It stood in the way
Of knowing the truth
Of your mind accepting
The bloody truth.

You know it must end
It had to one day
Take your own life
Let the sin decay.

On the floor
Of that room
Where bloody murder
Did resume.

Day after day
A heart stopped beating
Your deadly hunger
Thus was feeding.

So now
You'll wash that sin away
By taking
Just one life today.

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Please note, this poem does not reflect any of my real thoughts or feelings, im not a homicidal maniac (yet).


I am a broken toy,
Of no use to anyone,
But if you fix me up,
I'm sure we'll have some fun.

[This message has been edited by Broken Toy (03-07-2008 10:32 AM).]

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with you
1 posted 2008-03-06 06:17 PM


why did you post it if you think it goes against the guidelines?! seriously rude to do
wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
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the last place on earth
2 posted 2008-03-06 06:18 PM


yea its a bit violent but i really like it

something thats stupid but works isn't stupid

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09
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3 posted 2008-03-12 12:11 PM


Yeah I agree it is violent but I also liked it.
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