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XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland

0 posted 2008-02-27 09:09 PM



Told me I was beautiful,
said you'd love me forever.
Called me your's and I the
same, never knowing the
damage love can do.

Now I will lie on this
floor, bleeding for you.
Waiting for my new best
friend to come and take me
away. Waiting for pain to
help me to escape.

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

© Copyright 2008 Emmalee Yuri - All Rights Reserved
midnightdreamer
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Roy,ut
1 posted 2008-02-27 10:00 PM


great poem! i hate when someone does this to me or any of my friends.
midnightdreamer

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

firestorm
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since 2008-02-26
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2 posted 2008-02-28 02:57 PM


love can be so cruel at times-nicely put
eternally_singing
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since 2007-12-18
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3 posted 2008-03-01 01:16 PM



Amazing poem! To me, it describes the feel of a heartbreak that came unexpectedly, one where you need help being picked up from. Very well written!

Knowledge is power, power corrupts, study hard, be EVIL!

wisdomofthesword
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the last place on earth
4 posted 2008-03-04 05:25 AM


nice

something thats stupid but works isn't stupid

rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
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usa
5 posted 2008-03-04 10:18 PM


omg i love the acronym

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20
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inside the shadows
6 posted 2008-03-27 05:46 PM


new best friend...?

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

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7 posted 2008-03-27 09:31 PM


oh i know this feeling oh so well. great poem. i mean this is going in my library emily. thanks for a great read!!

XxZachXx

"What did you think I ment?"

haha yes im sort of crazy deep down inside. lol!!



hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
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at the beach... i wish
8 posted 2008-03-27 11:38 PM


nice write
hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
9 posted 2008-03-27 11:39 PM


btw i love how you put love in your title
Ocean Vuong
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since 2008-03-29
Posts 37
NYC
10 posted 2008-03-30 12:32 PM


nice write, watch your line breaks, they stagger the flow of the piece.


good luck,


-ocean

Tears-of-Sanity
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since 2007-09-05
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Kingdom Hearts
11 posted 2008-04-07 11:46 PM


This is a nice poem...

It is true that love sometimes can be more than just cruel, sometimes it takes everything we have and may falsen what we had believed in for eternity.  The most mysterious part of it is that it is not predictible and shoking most of the times.  I don't think I have ever fallen in love, but I hope it treats me kind once I do...  

Tears of Sanity~

XxForever.BrokenxX
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12 posted 2008-04-08 08:27 PM


Thank you all for ur replies. I was surprised to see that more people read it.
shattered-smiles..i think u know what i ment..well maybe not. I wasn't clear i guess, in the poem it's supposed to symbolise pain and fear as her new best friend, not literally someone else. You will always be my best friend, u know that.
Again, thanks for reading

  {~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Virtual Abyss
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since 2008-04-09
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13 posted 2008-04-10 12:42 PM


Interesting!  Allows much time for reflection while providing the reader the opportunity to decipher through their own personal inner soul as to who or what you are actual alluding too as the best friend.  I could actually take this as far as a relationship with  your cat.  Who could almost be a person and in your mind actually making verbal impressions.  It's loss could create a severe psychological impact and you could have been awaiting a new cat.

I like this very much for that fact because it allowed the reader to incorporate it's message (the poem's) in the manner in which they interpreted it.  Well done!

V/r,

Virtual Abyss


XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland
14 posted 2008-04-11 06:57 PM


Thank you, though I didn't really understand that. lol

   {~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

x-tears-x
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since 2008-04-13
Posts 43
England
15 posted 2008-04-13 05:36 PM


Really really great poem. I read it through a couple of times cause i liked it so much. Short and simple - nice.

Yey.xxx

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