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eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

0 posted 2007-12-18 09:50 PM

Aching for friendship in darkness unbearably heavy
The world around is grey and blurring at the edges
Silence punctures a hole into the heart
The stillness is deafening like the clanging of an unrelenting bell

Echoing emptiness envelops in an arctic cloud
Though the air is balmy, the heart is freezing
Loneliness, the frost encasing the forgotten rose
Turning it into a muted white
The brittle rose, breaks at the lightest touch
Wilts away, neglected

Time stretching to a stop
Weighing heavily over the heart
Listening hard, waiting,
A footstep, a voice,
Someone to hold
Dreaded solitude at bay

Alone
In the midst of a crowd
Indistinct shadows
No one breaking through
Barriers isolate and fold in crushing

Slowly, loneliness stalks
Creeping up unexpected and uninvited
Suffocating fear brings a metallic taste
Until someone reaches out, loneliness will continue to skulk mercilessly

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

1 posted 2007-12-19 01:16 PM

I really liked this one and felt I could relate, and love your screen name by the way, I'm a singer myself

Kate

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

2 posted 2007-12-19 05:57 PM

Very impressive...thanks for sharing...welcome aboard the pip talk express(ion).

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

3 posted 2007-12-20 12:39 PM

As above so below.

Very good poem and welcome to the darkside.... we have cookies.

eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

4 posted 2007-12-20 01:59 PM

Thank you for your comments! I am really glad that I found this forum. Oh, and cookies are always welcome though surpassed by the all conquering chocolate.

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

5 posted 2007-12-21 12:43 PM

ah so very true.... but we have chocolate chip cookies... can't beat that!

Tears-of-Sanity
Member

since 2007-09-05

Posts 121
Kingdom Hearts

6 posted 2007-12-23 08:34 AM

That was really nice!
I like this poem and I am glad to have you sharing your writings with us on these forums.

Hope I'd read more of what you write

L.W.~

Tears of Sanity~

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

7 posted 2007-12-23 02:34 PM

This was a very nice poem, in fact, I was a bit jealous at first. It seemed to embody the feelings of emptiness and neglect I sometimes feel. Carry on.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

8 posted 2007-12-23 05:39 PM

Thank you all for your comments! I am glad it was enjoyed.

Knowledge is power, power corrupts, study hard, be EVIL!

x-tears-x
Junior Member

since 2008-04-13

Posts 43
England

9 posted 2008-05-11 03:07 PM

Oh my gosh! How do you write like that?

that was really beautiful!

eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

10 posted 2008-05-12 05:22 PM

Thank you x-tears-x! I am glad you liked it.

At night a candle's brighter than the sun

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

11 posted 2008-05-13 06:43 PM

Stunning, absolutly stunning. This piece is in my library.

~*Julianna*~

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