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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
ok this has been going through my head constantly, so I had to write it down. This is a first draft so it might have a few issues here or there, let me know if it needs changing or just plain burning. ;-) SOMEWHERE RIGHT NOW . As I sit in the oncoming darkness One thought rushes through my head A mantra to all things Somewhere right now Someone is committing suicide Being born, dying from a massive heart attack, being beaten, Being murdered, getting raped, getting robbed, being threatened Having sex, about to drive headlong into an accident that will kill them, Cheating, winning money, losing it all Right now someone is kissing their partner for the final time, getting evicted, going on holiday, killing an animal, dying of old age, winning a contest, being told they have Cancer, getting hit by a car, choking to death, being stabbed Someone is climbing over the rail of a bridge looking down ready to embrace the earth, being fired from their job, losing a parent, losing a child, losing their mind Someone is being buried alive, drowning, being attacked by an wild animal, poisoning their partners food, drinking themselves to death, doing drugs, doing drugs for the last time Their body going cold as the world keeps turning A child is lost crying for their mother to save them, their echoes go unheard Someone is starting a fire that will kill many Someone has been drinking all night and are making their way to their car, keys in hand They will be the only one to survive the 5-car pile up Someone is falling asleep with a cigarette in his or her hand Never to wake up again A bank is being robbed Somewhere a child is killing another child just to see what it is like to kill Someone who has been eating the right food, keeping healthy to live a long and happy life just fell under a train A teenager just shot their parents for not letting them have what they wanted The latest cell phone The peer pressure killer of all ages A picture was painted A drawing that will change peoples lives forever A town was covered by a mudslide An earthquake killed generations Their bodies lay motionless in the rubble Another animal became extinct A new virus has been created that could kill the world An explosion ripped through a town A train derailed It goes on As it goes through my mind Somewhere right now all these things are happening Like so many other things I have failed to mention Somewhere right now Someone is writing a poem or story about everything that is happening in the world [This message has been edited by Seeker72 (11-26-2007 12:51 AM).] |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
I loved it and I thought that everything that you've written was very true. Kate |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
This is one of those that blow all the others out of the water.... this is effing amazing. Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
At first, I did not like it, but I continued to read. The words tugged at me, like they were dragging me to the scene of each incident described. I wish these things didn't happen, but denying it would be worse. Thanks for posting this. We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
MM you make me blush, I feel it's still a little rough but maybe thats how it should be read. Assassin_of_Verse. Thanks for hanging in there and finishing the poem, I'm glad you liked it. |
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jossal Junior Member
since 2007-09-15
Posts 23 |
ok, that was just amazing, and i too have had similar thoughts, but ouldn't have been able to picture it as you did. well done! Jossal Darkness is only the lack of light... |
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tonyV Junior Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 36 |
The poem feels very jagged, but that's what give it its texture. Easily one of the best I've read so far. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Thank you both very much for reading, glad you liked it. |
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