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Sky train neurosis
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Sky train neurosis |
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The dude New Member
since 2007-11-19
Posts 3 |
-Final day of a sky train jumper with a quick decantor looking to smoke a cadallac butt the jumper began to feel a little bit violently ill...... He rushed for the bathroom inside metro-town mall he puked up his guts as he ran toward the center of the mall he ran from his own scene hoping to go unnoticed as he made himself try and feel normal He went toward the pond and waterfall at the east end of the mall He fished out a pink crocodile and gave it next pretty girl he saw He stared into the pond and thought he saw a goldfish.. He thought he heard someone say "You boy , you boy are the crow that eats the ketchup ...pack!.................... .................mike." But the words were his own hallucination...he thought to himself. And then he got really uncomftorable. He ran straight for sky train bumping into people and tripping and untieing his shoelaces. He was shivering and sweating and was sure he was losing his mind. someone came up to him and said" them damn crows stole my happy meal" "What the hell? fast food and weird serendipidous crow bullshit? and then he turns around bumps into old lady with a murder of crows perched all over her and a mcdonalds bag in her hands.... He tripps over his shoelace and falls onto the track 15 seconds later the train crushes his torso. The jumper was the nephew of the well known mcdonalds owner and tycoon. the skytrain is shut down going between new west and nanaimo for three hours. seven dead crows are found that night with ketchup packs from mcdonalds being the cuase of death. |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
Have to say it was funny loved it!! Great job!! |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
I've had this experience... it is so well written because it's the raw feeling of what you were truly experiencing. It is not only that acid trip that many of us have experienced but it is also a parallel to what many of us feel in day to day life. Either way, it's accurate and really stood out. Good job!!!! ~~~May~~~ Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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