Murder! revenge! now and beyond.

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Dark Poetry #4

Murder! revenge! now and beyond.

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

0 posted 2007-11-15 07:13 PM

I never meant to do it!
I thought I could get away with it.
Her beauty was driving me crazy!
Stirring in me nasty thoughts and cravings
I was there laying next to her
Wishing that the intensity of my many nights never would have been!
Feeling dirty, feeling cheap I knew I had committed a sin
I washed away her and many others’s pureness
And burned the clothes to a crisp
Then I ran, ran, ran away
But the police captured me the second day
Now I stand here behind bars
I stand here ready to face all the racial wars
But behind this metal cage
I can see the prisoners eyes stare at me with rage
They know what I did to that beauty
They want to avenge the parents loss they think its up to them their last civil duty
Click! Click the metal door slides open and I step back
Thump! Thump my heart loudly beats
But I do not make a sound when the angry mob with homemade knives attack
Hot then cold so much pain to bear
Their faces are now getting distorted and they stand tall with a glazy stare
I was sick and hated myself every time
But now I lay here scared and waiting for death my soul to collect
I lay here waiting for the blackness to resurrect and take me for the committed crime
Slowly, slowly I wither away
Pain, more pain and everything turns grey
No more air! Can’t breathe! I am suffocating!
Their faces now familiar ready for revenge, waiting! Waiting! Hating!

Mystress May
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since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

1 posted 2007-11-15 07:46 PM

Written from the perspective of he who commited the crime... very intriguing. This really made me stop and think. I had to read it several times over. I find it disturbing but that is just a sign of a well-written poem. Good job doll.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

Shake
Junior Member

since 2006-11-17

Posts 40

2 posted 2007-11-17 10:41 AM

Encaptivating!
The rhymes were simple, but this was a very well written poem. It would make a good song with the right chorus. I liked it quite a bit!

7.5/10

Gods and Demons,
Keys, Lyrics, and Vocals
~Shake

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

3 posted 2008-03-13 03:59 PM

THANKS

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