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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
Sorrow floods the soul And though I know it’s unnecessary I can’t hold back the onslaught Wave after wave overwhelms me And I stumble back into my mood Of indifference detrimental to the mind Not caring whether I eat Not caring whether I sleep Not wishing to do anything for myself A fasting of the worst kind Segregating myself from the joy of life From fellowship and light As I go with the flow into the shadows Sad tunes blaring in my ears As I transport myself away To a land of tears And of suffering No smile touches my lips Regardless of their proclivity to do such Only the darkness enters my mind, Coldness seeping through my veins To encompass my entire being And I let it Shoving off to sea with no rudder No mast No compass Looking simply for a storm and a bad time, Numb to the danger I face Looking for the loudest the volume can go Before I can no longer think ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Hey doll... I feel that this is very 'disconnected'. It doesn't seem to flow. The words are great... it just seems as though your heart isn't connected to the words you are writing. Does that make sense? Or perhaps I am just sensing a deep desolation? Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
you have a point. as I reread it after typing it, I noticed it too. Despite this, I didn't have the heart to change it. That's the way it flowed out so I'm cool with it. I suppose a little imagination could smooth it out a bit...lol ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
I have poems like that... they ARE the moment that they were written and to change it would be to lose that moment. If that made any sense to you haha.  Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I have felt that way many times. It is something I feel I need to fight but sometimes that is too much effort. |
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