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voice2bheard
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since 2007-10-19
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New York

0 posted 2007-11-05 10:41 AM



This poem is based on real events:

Today wasn't the best day for me,

I'm about to tell you something you won't believe

today I got in a car crash

and right before my eyes, a light flashed

the moment went so fast and quick

it took me a while to really know this

I got in a car carsh today

and it made me realize theres things I have to say

I don't want to leave, I'm not ready to go

theres still things everyone should know,

I love music, I love to sing,

there worth more to me than a diamond ring

I love my friends, wouldn't be here without them,

my family also, wish I realized it back then

to the boy I've known for so many years,

last night for you I creid so many tears,

when I should look in your eyes

and say that I love you

because I've known for so long that it really is true

so don't go on throwing your life away

because little did you know, there was something to say,

live for right now and not the past

because for all you know, today could be your last

Kate

© Copyright 2007 Kate - All Rights Reserved
Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24
Posts 387
Oregon USA
1 posted 2007-11-05 10:56 AM


I liked this one.

While your other poems are good, they don't really have a darkness to them but this one has an undertone to it.

There is flesh in this one, have you thought about making it longer?

You have a lot to play with in a poem like this one.

Good job V2B.

voice2bheard
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since 2007-10-19
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New York
2 posted 2007-11-05 10:59 AM


thanks this was so real and unexpected it just happend
Mystress May
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since 2007-10-25
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Taunton, MA
3 posted 2007-11-05 09:09 PM


hey doll... I really like this one a lot.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

voice2bheard
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4 posted 2007-11-07 09:09 AM


thank you!!!
voice2bheard
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5 posted 2009-12-16 05:13 AM


AND BY THE WAY YES THIS WAS REAL!!

Kate

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