Dark Poetry #4 |
CAR CRASH |
voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
This poem is based on real events: Today wasn't the best day for me, I'm about to tell you something you won't believe today I got in a car crash and right before my eyes, a light flashed the moment went so fast and quick it took me a while to really know this I got in a car carsh today and it made me realize theres things I have to say I don't want to leave, I'm not ready to go theres still things everyone should know, I love music, I love to sing, there worth more to me than a diamond ring I love my friends, wouldn't be here without them, my family also, wish I realized it back then to the boy I've known for so many years, last night for you I creid so many tears, when I should look in your eyes and say that I love you because I've known for so long that it really is true so don't go on throwing your life away because little did you know, there was something to say, live for right now and not the past because for all you know, today could be your last Kate |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
I liked this one. While your other poems are good, they don't really have a darkness to them but this one has an undertone to it. There is flesh in this one, have you thought about making it longer? You have a lot to play with in a poem like this one. Good job V2B. |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
thanks this was so real and unexpected it just happend |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
hey doll... I really like this one a lot. Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
thank you!!! |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
AND BY THE WAY YES THIS WAS REAL!! Kate |
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