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Angel101¢¾!
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since 2007-10-21
Posts 48
Lost in pain

0 posted 2007-10-23 10:21 PM



Tonight it is so cold and weary.

I cannot tell if i'm dead or alive.

I hear them say,
"it wasn't my fault that i made him leave,
and the death angel played his part",
but on the inside i don't listen because i know it was my fault he had faugt with me and left.

I don't know if i'm imagining this,
but i hear his familiar voice than the sound of crashing metal.

Now i'm possitive hes gone.

The death angel took him from me so i am alone>

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Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24
Posts 387
Oregon USA
1 posted 2007-10-24 12:50 PM


Not bad at all.

You're getting better very quickly.

Still, you really need to concentrate on punctuation and spelling, they are also the key to a smooth flowing poem.

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member
since 2007-10-21
Posts 48
Lost in pain
2 posted 2007-10-25 09:35 PM


thanks but i did not mean 2 write this my friend thats a guy got hit by a car when i told him 2 go home because we were fighting then about a half hour later they said he was on his way home and a semi truck flipped on his car.he was killed instantly and i'll i could think 2 do was write so i havent had time 2 edit it but i thought it almost exspresed my pain.
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