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Dark Poetry #4

Death angel

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member

since 2007-10-21

Posts 48
Lost in pain

0 posted 2007-10-23 10:21 PM

Tonight it is so cold and weary.

I cannot tell if i'm dead or alive.

I hear them say,
"it wasn't my fault that i made him leave,
and the death angel played his part",
but on the inside i don't listen because i know it was my fault he had faugt with me and left.

I don't know if i'm imagining this,
but i hear his familiar voice than the sound of crashing metal.

Now i'm possitive hes gone.

The death angel took him from me so i am alone>

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

1 posted 2007-10-24 12:50 PM

Not bad at all.

You're getting better very quickly.

Still, you really need to concentrate on punctuation and spelling, they are also the key to a smooth flowing poem.

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member

since 2007-10-21

Posts 48
Lost in pain

2 posted 2007-10-25 09:35 PM

thanks but i did not mean 2 write this my friend thats a guy got hit by a car when i told him 2 go home because we were fighting then about a half hour later they said he was on his way home and a semi truck flipped on his car.he was killed instantly and i'll i could think 2 do was write so i havent had time 2 edit it but i thought it almost exspresed my pain.

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