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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
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0 posted 2003-12-05 05:55 PM

I wrote this so my freind could see where her boyfreind was coming from when he broke up with her because he had leukemia. as sad as it was to write it, it helped... for her and me.

It does hurt
It is hard
But I am tough
I have to be
I will not turn and run
I will not break down at the last moment
For the man doesn’t
He remains a man
And now I face you
Look into your sorrowful blue eyes
And I collapse
Not on the outside
But inside I do
And I tell you what I have to
And when I see your eyes swell
Your lip quiver
I turn
So you don’t see
A lonely tear slide down my face
You touch my hand
And I remember the nights
We would stay up talking
I would be enthralled by ur voice
I remember thinking
How beautiful it is
I wondered if a sound could be beautiful
And I thought yes
Because that is what you are
Beautiful
You come to face me
And I wince
When I see
Your tear-striken face
You whisper with your beautiful voice
One word which spun my head
In its web of answers
“Why?”
That is what set me off
I sank to me knees and held your hand
“My pain is intense
“But what would be worse
“Is if I left
“I could never stand the pain
“I would put you through”
I bowed my head
And hid in the shame
And pain
Of being taken over
By a snake
Which has tied itself around me
As you stand above me you touch my head
And I remember when
You used to play with my hair
That was when I had hair
I start crying again
You insist it would not change us
I said it would jeopardise
You told me it wouldn’t beat me
And all I could say
“It already has"

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

1 posted 2003-12-05 06:29 PM

This poem made me cry. Just wow...so emotional and I actually felt like I was right there in both of their lives. You have alot of talent and I look forward to reading more from you.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
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2 posted 2003-12-05 08:00 PM

thank you

that has made my day wat u said. wanna make a deal? this can be a place where we post poems? you post one of your then i post one of mine? cause i really really love your work.

ok???

darkness

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

3 posted 2003-12-06 01:57 AM

This is so sad. Sickness, and in health is the way we feel when we love someone. Either of them...sick or healthy we want to be with that person no matter what. This must have been painful for your friend, and for you to watch it happen. Here's hoping all gets better for them both, and you.
Love,
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-12-07 06:24 PM

ahh Darkness . .
this is touching, MY GOD
beautiful writing
I am sorry for the loss

to all of you

(check your spelling,k?)

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

5 posted 2003-12-08 12:21 PM

Oh god,that made me cry. i felt every single word you said in this poem and it stung like a thousand tiny peices of glass,your so talented,never never ever forget that.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
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6 posted 2003-12-08 12:33 PM

thnx everybody
i apprecaite wat u say heaps

its so cool to have a place were you can post poems and not be afraid of wat people say....

thnx agen for ur comments and actually bothering to read my work... thnx to wat people say i am actually starting to believe people wen they say im kinda gd.... im a bit hard on myself sumtimes! haha

darkness

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2003-12-08 11:27 AM

THis poem made me feel kind of guilty for taking life for granted sometimes. When I get a few minutes later I'm gonna write something worth reading. lol

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

8 posted 2003-12-08 09:28 PM

aww hun, this is so sad...very touching and beautiful, I like it. *hugs* I hope things get better for you guys.

- River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

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