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Dark Poetry #4

Prison in My Soul

Prudy
Junior Member

since 2007-10-22

Posts 13
the prison inside me

0 posted 2007-10-22 02:10 AM

Prison in My Soul

I hear but I do not listen,
I talk but I do not speak,
I see but I do not understand,
I breathe but I am not alive.

I have been left as the wandering dead,
Living but not alive,
A prisoner inside my soul,
Waiting for the time I am freed.

Sadly that time shall never come,
For the only key to my cell is you,
Your body and soul,
Your Love.

The love that can’t be given,
The love taken by someone else,
Gone forever.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2007-10-22 06:35 AM

Welcome to Pip, R'Dolfo!
We're glad to have you!

Thank you for this poem. Lately, my poems have been slightly skewed and this has definitely swept me back to my dark roots. Very apt for this forum, I do believe.

Nice form, but ah, love, we shall never conquer.

Hollow.
Courtney.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

illusiveangel
Member

since 2007-10-22

Posts 72
Liverpool, UK

2 posted 2007-10-22 04:27 PM

Oh how terrible tragic but something that so many can relate to. Incredibly well written I feel. I perticularly like the first verse, so uncomplicated. Well done.x

Prudy
Junior Member

since 2007-10-22

Posts 13
the prison inside me

3 posted 2007-10-22 07:29 PM

Thanks for the comments all very supportive.
I've been working on a new poem not as dark but I need help finishing it.

Any help would be appreciated

In Dreams

I am with you again,
I can hear and see you,
Touch you and hold you,
I am finally whole again.

Yet something’s wrong,
It is too perfect,
The sights the smells,
This can’t be right.

You begin to fade,
Darkness envelops you,
Hides you and takes you away,
I wake up.

How cruel dreams are,
They give me what I want,
Only to have me lose you again,

I want to add:
The tears don't fall,
I feel sad but the tears won't fall,

but I don't know where to add them
again any help would be appreciated.

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member

since 2007-10-21

Posts 48
Lost in pain

4 posted 2007-10-22 10:55 PM

MAY B AFTER ITS 2 PERFECT?[JUST A SUGGESTION

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