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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Spiritual lethargy Corrupt perversion Disobey me control me contort me Empty my heart of love and desire Satisfy me with blindness Pagan soul Suicide holds the water at bay Jesus, I heard you What did you say Suicide holds the idiot's hand Jesus, I heard you What did you say Suicide won't take me away Jesus, I heard you What did you say Life inside my night The words juice and flow Truth deliberately in denial My throat hurts from the sickness This disease of love tearing a Hole In my skull Fillets of me A true capitallist does intriguing A selfish man trapped in himself Let the worms eat him Affectionate passionate desire for prominent power Little fish, regurgitate that fake bread |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
Craig..... I love it! My favourite line is 'Truth deliberately in denial' .... it strikes a chord in me. Had you considered the word 'false' instead of 'fake'? This piece doesn't seem to have a lot of harder letters.... you seem to have stuck with the softer sounds, so it may give it a smoother flow? ~~~May~~~ Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
No I hadn't considered using 'false' instead of 'fake.' Maybe I should have... Thank you. -GIS |
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eternally_singing Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 123PA, United States |
“Suicide holds the water at bay Jesus, I heard you What did you say Suicide holds the idiot's hand Jesus, I heard you What did you say Suicide won't take me away Jesus, I heard you What did you say” Very well done! Thank you for sharing. At night a candle's brighter than the sun |
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