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moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

0 posted 2007-10-11 04:26 AM

Internal Combustion

Sun spot flares, and rocking chairs.
And stars that shoot from the hip.

Before my eyes, I was cast,
into the void of nuclear fission.

Got lost in space,
and forgot my mission.

Out at the edge of the Universe,
'till hunger pulled me back to nurse.

At last I recalled,
the final verse.

And awoke in the back,
of a Cadillac hearse.

Homeward bound,
in a pine box.

Finally I listened,
to the owl and the fox.

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2007-10-11 08:46 AM

I love the words you have used in this. Particularly the first few lines

It should be lengthened and made into a song!!!!

It's better to be a lion for a day than a sheep all your life.
-- Sister Elizabeth Kenny

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

2 posted 2007-10-11 10:27 AM

Another good one MD, I liked it.

It flowed perfectly and being a morbid bugger I loved how it ended.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

3 posted 2007-10-11 10:40 AM

thanks taramw, I was just enjoying your poem "I wasn't worth it," on open poetry #41.
I see what you mean...like after the word nurse..it could be added to. Thanks for your insight.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

4 posted 2007-10-11 10:42 AM

Hey Seeker72, I love your poems so much that it's a special treat getting a compliment from you...thanks man.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

5 posted 2007-10-11 10:59 AM

Stop it you'll make me blush. ;-)

The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

6 posted 2007-10-11 08:04 PM

very nice phrasing, great choice of words

take care

The Mongrel cat came home, Holding half a head proceeded to show it off to all his new found friends

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

7 posted 2007-10-11 11:56 PM

Thanks for the feedback TJ, much appreciated.
moon.

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

8 posted 2007-10-16 02:34 PM

Wow I feel so privileged to have read that, because I love your writing. Amazing work as always

Abbeon

The world behind these thoughtful eyes, caution may seem crazy.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

9 posted 2007-10-27 04:59 PM

Where is Moondogz?

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

10 posted 2007-11-01 10:58 PM

dead.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

11 posted 2007-11-02 06:39 AM

thanks Abbeon...and here's a treat for you,
go to you tube...call up this..http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rxH39QlRuhg if that doesn't make you wish you were there...well...rock on!!!!

[This message has been edited by moondogz (11-02-2007 09:38 AM).]

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

12 posted 2007-11-02 12:32 PM

How sad.

R.I.P moondogz.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

13 posted 2007-11-02 02:48 PM

well thanks Seeker72, but I missed all my pip talk pals so I decided to reincarnate...good to see you again.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

14 posted 2007-11-02 08:04 PM

Good to see your return.

Missed seeing you around here.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

15 posted 2007-11-02 09:17 PM

that's mighty kind of you to say Seeker72, hopefully I'll get a chance to read some of your latest "jewels."

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

16 posted 2007-11-03 12:13 PM

Read away sire.

There are a few I have posted... some of them are a bit.. weird.

so good luck with them.

I am happy to see you back.

Mystress May
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since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

17 posted 2007-11-04 12:30 PM

moondogz.... this one really makes me happy.... you're very talented!

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

18 posted 2007-11-04 02:20 AM

Mystress May thank you for your kind words.

roseofwinter
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since 2007-12-03

Posts 12

19 posted 2007-12-06 09:25 AM

Enjoyed this, inspired a poem in me. Thanks for posting this, and I agree it should be a song.

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

20 posted 2007-12-08 01:30 AM

thanks for your comments roseofwinter (nice name) looks like you've been dippin' into the pipsters archives...good for you.

eternally_singing
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since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

21 posted 2007-12-20 02:13 PM

I love the words you used in this, especially the first stanza:

Sun spot flares, and rocking chairs.
And stars that shoot from the hip.

Great poem

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

22 posted 2007-12-20 05:31 PM

thanks for the compliments eternally-singing, very kind of you to dig into this old dogs archives.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

23 posted 2007-12-31 01:15 AM

its good to listen to wiser voices

Jesus is real.

-GIS

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

24 posted 2008-01-01 11:52 PM

niice

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