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Dark Poetry #4

You are your ghost.

jossal
Junior Member

since 2007-09-15

Posts 23

0 posted 2007-09-21 02:40 PM

An angel,
To the demon,
Of your nightmares.

I'm the one,
Who makes you kill,
You wish me gone,
Let life stand still.

Wars are mine,
You fight for me,
Sacred shrines,
For the enemy.

Blood spilt in my name,
The cause of war,
Poverty, hatred and vain,
There will be more.

I'm your ghost no matter what you do.
Who am I?
I am you.

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2007-10-11 09:43 AM

why hasn't anyone posted to this yet?!!! IT IS EXCELLENT!!!

So much light and shade... can mean so many differnt things to the reader.

Well done

I have no idea what you were thinking inside your head when you wrote this or what circumstances fuelled it... but I SAW MANY THINGS.

Well done

I LOVED IT!!! The best poem I have read on here in ages.

It's better to be a lion for a day than a sheep all your life.
-- Sister Elizabeth Kenny

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

2 posted 2007-10-11 08:06 PM

very good poem.. i enjoyed the ending line quite a bit

The Mongrel cat came home, Holding half a head proceeded to show it off to all his new found friends

FlipPhone
New Member

since 2007-10-11

Posts 4
NY, NY

3 posted 2007-10-11 08:26 PM

Not sure I understand some of your contradictions here.

Seems like you've thrown some lines in there to just fill in the cracks.

Maybe you have something larger going on in this that we can't see the full frame of.

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