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Sir_Vampire
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0 posted 2007-09-17 05:57 AM



Tears… A humble trickle a screaming downfall
Oblivious to you as I begin to crawl
Your words are venom to my heart
Do you wish for us to part?
You turn your back to me when I need you
I’m starting to think we are through
But to you we were never together
You used me now this is the final teather
I have heaved my last sigh and cried my last tear
My hate for you now stronger than my fear
Your lies bring more pain than your fists ever did
Now I am leaving and oh god let me see him again please forbid
My heart cannot take any more of his poisoned lies
Now I see through them and there will be no more “good byes”

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

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Sir_Vampire
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1 posted 2007-09-17 05:58 AM


abit jumbled, but i hope the message is clear....

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2007-09-17 03:15 PM


I liked this it had a really good flow to it but hey, all your stuff does
Krysti

Tears-of-Sanity
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3 posted 2007-09-27 09:38 AM


This is a nice poem and I like it a lot
Good work

Tears of Sanity~

comoloco7
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since 2007-09-21
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4 posted 2007-09-28 08:51 AM


its raw, but very deep.  Its a topic that drives very closely to home.  Its always good to hear the emotions in a piece like this.  Keep it up.

In the blood soaked battle field, bleach the bones of countless millions who in the midst of victory stopped to rest, and resting they died.

Temptress
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5 posted 2007-09-28 05:30 PM


it should only ever take one goodbye...some get through that one and some don't.

This one spoke to my experience...enjoyed

"...buried way beneath the sheets
I think she's having a meltdown..."
"Buckcherry"

etard
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6 posted 2007-09-28 09:25 PM


That was great poem. I loved it
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