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jossal Junior Member
since 2007-09-15
Posts 23 |
Darkness,lack of light, Inspired by evil, To create fright, Fight your way through. Darkness, swirling, A mysterious fog, Horrors unfurling, Thick as smog. Darkness, to encourage death, Fight with all your might, But remember, remember, Darkness is only the lack of light. Darkness is only the lack of light... |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
chilling, i liked it "darkness is only the lack of light" Interesting thoughts going on. "All that we see or seem Is but a dream within a dream." ~Edgar Allan Poe~ |
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Kitherion Member
since 2006-08-01
Posts 181Johannesburg |
I loved the thoughts behind it, but the rhyming was awful. You started off with a brilliant scheme, but then it just fell away. The poem itself jarred my sense of reality, but then it was lost I'm afraid. "Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..." |
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Tears-of-Sanity Member
since 2007-09-05
Posts 121Kingdom Hearts |
Your definition of darkness was cool, otherwise the rhyming is not that much. I am not so good of a poet myself, but I am trying to be better  I once read something about everything that is just, in reality, the lack of something... Cold is lack of heat. Darkness is the lack of light. Daydreaming is the lack of belief in reality.. that sort of things. *hehe*Over all, that was a good job Tears of Sanity~ |
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jossal Junior Member
since 2007-09-15
Posts 23 |
Thanks for the comments. Awful rhyming? Hmmm. I think my "sitting in the corner" is better, though not perfect... Darkness is only the lack of light... |
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comoloco7 Junior Member
since 2007-09-21
Posts 31MA |
you have the heart, form needs work. cant wait to see what you post next. In the blood soaked battle field, lay the bones of countless millions who in the midst of battle stopped to rest, and resting they died. |
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