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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
In these Quite moments I watch you’re face as you stare into the mirror The reflection I see is so painfully clear Brushing you’re hair for hours it seems Wondering what thoughts lie in you’re head; what shattered dreams? Tell me please what is it you see Looking back through the mirror at me Two different people really nothing alike You never give up and I continue to fight Everyday I see such a strong person before my eyes But now here before me you’ve grown smaller in size I wonder sometimes how you deal with all the pain How you can look back on everything and still stay sane? The light outside is fading and everyones sound alseep I can tell from you're expression that you're thoughts are deep Touching you’re shoulder you wake from another time And I look into you’re tired blue eyes That are the same as mine ~Should the truth be so buried in the endless cemetery of broken dreams?~ |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
"And I look into you’re tired blue eyes That are the same as mine" Wow, i'm speechless...this is amazing! The flow, the rhyming, all perfect  This poem drew me into it when i read it. Amazing!So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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blue face Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 92 |
very deep I really can relate to this hope to read more. sarah |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
"And I look into you’re tired blue eyes That are the same as mine" I have a weird fascination with mirrors and often wonder who it is that looks back at me. I really loved this poem. Thank you. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Kira this is amazing, I loved the ending... luv always Krysti ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Hi everybody! Thank you for reading my poem ^_^ ~Should the truth be so buried |
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littlefairy Member
since 2007-08-06
Posts 51New York |
Hello i think your poem was quite wonderful. I am very usually picky of preference for poetry and i enjoyed yours. It was great work it held passion. Wonderful truly. -Tara |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Liked the insight you put into this one. Ah...what is poetry but a mirror. Yoin |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
I like...could it be the doppleganger? |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
A Doppelgänger... that would make for a good poem also. I almost met my Doppelgänger once missed him by 15 minutes. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
count your blessings seeker....I met mine head on after reading that book "The Red Lion." |
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