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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE 
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Red tears fall from blackened eyes; So swollen, it's hard to see; As blood drips from her wounds, As sweat falls from her soaked hair; Bruises hurt when you touch them. She cringes as you try to help. Through the sobs of dispair, She apologizes numerous times For bleeding on your expensive Italian rug. Lip is busted open; You can barely make out her words. You nod and say it is alright. Bath water running in the other room; Hot, but still bearable. You leave her alone to clean up; Door is open, to be safe. She screams with terrible dismay... Skin black and blue; painful. Sopping white t-shirt on the floor, Stained permanently red. You throw it away, get her something new, Lay it on the guest bed Where she will stay; For a week or so, possibly longer. Smart, wonderful, beautiful girl; If only she saw what you see. She deserves so much more... Tell her to leave him... She knows, but doesn't listen. She should be with you. Fluffy white bath robe; She crosses the floor on trembling legs. It hurts you to see her this way... Tears well up in her eyes; With open arms you take her in. Mind screams, "I love you"... Heart breaks with her tears. Lips say, "It will be okay"... Silence fills the air... She falls asleep in your arms... Leaving her at peace for a while.* **To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.** |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I think this is better than some of the stuff I see here. Its apparently better than alot of stuff I write. I liked the story of it. And the ending was more original than most, in which the poet him/herself dies. Good write. GIS Closed will remain closed until opened. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Does this ever sound familiar. You say all the words you think you can say that will make good sense so that it sways them to get out, and leave, but they still go back. Breaks your heart when you say things that would show it's better they move ahead in life without all the pain, and then I saw something, no matter how many words, sensible, or not it has to come from within them. It has to be a self-realization. Brought back so many memories, and I thank God this was so long ago, and she is now out of contact, but her daughters are grown now and on their own. Very painful to read this, but it's the way it really is. All the way down to the bed to sleep in, and the batb water. This took me a step back in time. Here's hoping your friend is ok now. Sending  , and prayers.  Love, Terri~  |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
sad, painful and beautiful. You've hit a spot, excellent write. I honestly think you've got talent. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Woah Jenn, I realllllllyyyyy liked this. The story was awesome, so was the imagery you used so vividly. Great job. The whole time I was reading it, I could just see the red blood you talk of. Awesome write. I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
OOO if you only knew...7 years of my life where spent there among the black and the blue... Hard for me to read...but beautifully said. ~sigh~ Until...ali {alibaster} "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."(C)alibaster |
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