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silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2007-06-04 06:17 PM

through the weather stained window
i can see what you've left behind
in the brittle,
decaying fruit tree
and in the unsettled,
upside down chairs
i see what you create
and destroy
in your absence

without you in this house
i'm a mess
sitting here by the window
with my tattered pyjamas,
hanging off me pathetically
looking out
waiting
where are you?
home soon?
please.

still at the window
the light outside vanished
replaced with the catastrophic,
blackness
that night blankets
around my delicate frame
keeping me safe,
until you are back home
here with me.
please.

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

1 posted 2007-06-04 06:53 PM

I really liked this one! it was very inspiring(however you spell that).

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

2 posted 2007-06-04 10:20 PM

I liked it very much.

My better half is away at the moment and I can relate to the loss and sadness that wraps you up and smothers your very existence.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

3 posted 2007-06-13 05:06 AM

thanks guys, i liked this one.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2007-09-01 06:29 PM

i made this a song. Courtney where are you?? Read this!

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

5 posted 2007-10-22 04:37 AM

Sorry!
I seem to be forgetting poetry ever so frequently these days, which is a shame. But I am so glad I came on tonight instead of doing homework (which must really be done, and now you've distracted me entirely).
I really did enjoy this, wholly. I love it when poets use interesting imagery and when they discuss trees; even though your decaying fruit tree was enough to make sad. I like it a hell of a lot, I felt the waiting you know? And it was sad and lonely and desperate. Excellent, excellent work. (And title, may I add).

Always,
Hollow.
Courtney.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

trUstNooNe
Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 91

6 posted 2007-10-27 08:35 PM

Good, Very real. Nice Job.

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