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Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

0 posted 2007-05-13 09:07 PM

Some days I look to the chink of the past,
A warm rushing light; forever fading,
Sometimes I feel happy but it won't last,
Memories slip past; without staying,
Some how the world seems as happy and warm,
Most days it seems cruel; seems unenduring,
Some days are bright and seem to be the norm,
Others stark outlook; dark emotions whirring,
Some days are lonely with no one around,
Some days are just as lonely within a crowd,
Some days all feelings just seem to run aground,
Some days it feels emotions blast too loud,
Some day I'll learn to leave the past behind,
But for now I'll look back with a full mind.

Kitherion
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 181
Johannesburg

1 posted 2007-05-17 12:45 PM

I Like it... alot. But... this is the big one

... I thought that the rhyme scheme kinda made it a bit juvenile...

"Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..."

mged
Junior Member

since 2007-03-29

Posts 39
ND

2 posted 2007-05-17 09:46 AM

i liked this alot

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

3 posted 2007-05-18 03:48 PM

Kitherion-mmm...maybe but thanx 4 ur coments its a while since i wrote a piece

mged - thanks

luvvbuzz
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 24

4 posted 2007-05-26 08:36 AM

i like this, it says about need for human companionship, i didnt find it juvenile at all.
the last line says to me that you are happy to stay as you are.

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

5 posted 2007-05-26 12:13 PM

Days to me are fleeting thought. Something used to mark the passage of time.
I rate days on what i feel, or see i thought that this poem was almost like that.
I think that is the main reason i LIKE it, and becasue its individual.

Thanks so much for sharing.

Abbeon

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

6 posted 2007-05-27 05:22 PM

luvvbuzz - I guess eveybody just takes it in different ways.

Addeon - thanks

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